P2: Proposal and Client Documentation

After pitching my idea to the group I received the following feedback-

-Could the film have a more sinister feel?


In order to make the idea more sinister and scary I could take out the comedic aspects of the story and focus entirely on scaring an audience.

-Could the film have any more paranormal activity on the basis of horror?


With the the story line moment when the boy is killed I could use some supernatural effects or paranormal activity to add to the horror. This could be done by having him come back or a ghost of some sort. Or I could have the girl being far more scary and grotesque with her murdering.


-How could could you get people to relate the the film/engaged?


Having a young cast and a female killer a lot more people can be engaged and relate to this cast and story line.


-Does the pilot have potential to make an entire series?


From the point where the boy is killed the story has a wide angle to go from developing into many moments such as finding out who the killer is as well as Matilda being killed and the journey of the boy going on the run.


Final Idea - 

My series is going to be called 'Pigeon Hunt'

Pilot Episode -

We introduce the main characters

-Matthew (17), Protagonist
-Matilda (16), Killer
-James (16), Murder Victim

We open the episode with an introduction to the characters. It will initially follow the protagonist (Matthew), showing him as a character, understanding what sort of person he is. We then introduce the other two characters through the company of the protagonist. We get to understand their personalities through how they react to things and their way of life. At the start they are doing what they enjoy. Being out in the woods. The episode fully opens with a title sequence and a gun shot, which quickly cuts to a shot of a smoking barrel and our protagonist shooting bottles and cans.

The episode covers how the characters behave with each other and addresses their lifestyle. We follow them doing the things they enjoy such as making fires, dens and messing around in the woods. We see how they're clearly a reject group of people from the way they are. Their personalities are different to common teenagers.

The main aim of the pilot episode is to show how strange each character is, and how they compare to each other. The girl is certainly not a normal person. She says strange things and finds gruesome things satisfying such as killing animals.

When the younger boy James is found to be missing, the tone and mood stays fairly similar. The two others don't react very dramatically to his disappearance. And believe he will return soon. A couple of days later when they find his body in his own bed the episode gets a lot darker. The older boy Matthew doesn't really know hoe to react. He goes int the woods to the groups den. The girl comes up  behind him and talks strangely. She then pulls a hunting knife on him. He avoids it, and then he pulls his air rifle out which accidentally shoot her in the head. Here the screen would g black but we wouldn't know who is dead. That information would be revealed in the next episode. To draw in the audience, a half cliff hanger.